The tanka is a fairly new poetry form in the United States. It originated in Japan about 1200 years ago. Non- rhyming and similar to the haiku, tanka uses more syllables than haiku. It also makes use of similes, metaphors, and personification. This means that tanka allows the writer to add more of herself to the poem, including emotions. Tanka consists of five non-rhyming lines that are arranged in a 5-7-5-7-7 pattern, like this:

Line one: 5 syllables
Line two: 7 syllables
Line three: 5 syllables
Line four: 7 syllables
Line five 7 syllables 

Full, gracious beauty
smiling steadily above
tugging with purpose
at ocean's changing shoreline
embracing steadfast sweethearts.

 


Cassy
05/15/2013 1:06pm

Full orb ascending
casting shadows on the sea
ocean waves beckon
surfers gather on the shore
hopeful for the perfect wave

Melody
05/15/2013 1:32pm

I like the poetic feel of the first line.

Kamana
05/15/2013 2:32pm

Your poem was very interesting. I especially liked the casting shadows on the sea.

Isaac
05/15/2013 2:35pm

I really like the creativity

Anees
05/15/2013 1:12pm

the moon is shining
the moon is shining brightly
the moon comes at night
the moon comes at night with stars
the moon shines at night with stars

Lilinoe
05/15/2013 1:36pm

I liked how you made the point clear that you were talking about the moon.

Marcos
05/15/2013 1:13pm

The moon is shiny
new moon is dark and empty
at night the moon appears
the moon shines like stars at night
the moon goes out at sunset

Noah
05/15/2013 4:51pm

Marcos, I liked how you had used the New Moon in your tanka.

Lilinoe
05/15/2013 4:55pm

Could you possibly change the sunset part to sunrise?

Ryleer
05/15/2013 4:59pm

I like how you said alot about the moon and new moon

Marcos
05/15/2013 5:01pm

the moon is shiny
its bright like the starry sky
it looks large and round
at night time the moon appears
it is time to go to bed

Matt
05/15/2013 7:08pm

I liked how you described the moon and the new moon

Melody
05/15/2013 1:14pm

Moon shines bright at night
Stars twinkle in the night sky
beauty over earth
Moon pulls tides, tides lap at shore
Go sleep now, Sun comes up soon

Melody
05/15/2013 4:50pm

I like the way yours talks about the ocean too

Melody
05/15/2013 4:52pm

Wait, who are you? Are you me?

Chelsea
05/15/2013 5:00pm

I like how you arranged your words and lines together.

Melody
05/15/2013 4:51pm

Moon shines bright at night
Stars twinkle in the night sky
beauty over earth
Moon pulls tides, tides lap at shore
Must sleep now, Sun comes up soon


Revised Tanka

Mrs. Rooney
05/15/2013 4:54pm

I LOVE the line about the moon pulling the tide and tides lapping at the shore.

Cassidy
05/15/2013 1:14pm

Moon Beauty Night Dark
Light tides Bumpy Rough sleep space
Gravity Bold Big
Craters Faces angles Hard
Round cool bright phase Full

Mika
05/15/2013 4:52pm

Malia, I like the words you put in your poem. Like the word wandering.

Cassidy
05/15/2013 4:53pm

I have a couple simile errors.

Malia
05/15/2013 1:15pm

Crescent in the sky
Floating,Mellow,Sleep
Shinning bright all night
Wandering, Misty, Frosted
Making tides go all about

Malia
05/15/2013 4:46pm

Crescent in the sky
Floating,Mellow,Sleep
Shining bright all night
Wandering,Misty,Frosted
Making tides go all around

Mika
05/15/2013 4:49pm

I like the words you put into your poem. Like the word Wandering.

Cassidy
05/15/2013 4:52pm

I like the part where you use words to describe the moon

Mika
05/15/2013 1:15pm

The beautiful Moon
gigantic, exceptional
A one of a kind
Up high in the dark,night sky
Up high with the bright,light stars

Olivia
05/15/2013 4:47pm

I like the repetitive ness

Malia
05/15/2013 4:49pm

I liked how you were repetitive and it made the Tanka go together.

Mina
05/15/2013 4:54pm

I like the words you chose, Very creative.

Katie-Lynn
05/15/2013 4:59pm

I love how you talked about the beautiful moon and how all the words go together greatly.

Gabby
05/15/2013 7:19pm

I like how you used your words in the second line. It really joins in together with the first line. Very good wording.

Rylee
05/15/2013 1:16pm

Moon, Bright, Bumpy, Sleep
Beauty, Hard, Space, Dark, Phases
Round, Craters, Angles
Tired, Cool, Quiet, White
Faces, Night, Bold, Peacefull

Rylee
05/15/2013 4:53pm

I liked how i posted properties about the moon

kamana
05/15/2013 4:59pm

I liked how you picked your words and how you also discribed the moon.

Olivia
05/15/2013 1:18pm

Big and Beautiful
Round, Tilted, circling
Pale and spotted
Dark, Light and Grey
Huge,bright, Darkening

Olivia
05/15/2013 4:57pm

The words flow fast in my mind

Lilinoe
05/15/2013 4:58pm

You are very poetic. Keep it up!

Mika
05/15/2013 4:59pm

I like the first line in your poem. I also like the second line too because to me it makes me feel calm.

Mina
05/15/2013 5:01pm

I like how you mostly described about the moon and how you think the moon is to your perspective Olivia

MIna
05/15/2013 1:19pm

The Moon is lit
In the night, dark sky
It goes around
In the sky of Earth
It spins and changes

Olivia
05/15/2013 4:49pm

I can tell you put a lot of effort into you work :)

Malia
05/15/2013 4:51pm

I liked how your first and second line went together so it sounded like they went together.

Mina
05/15/2013 4:52pm

The Moon is a light
In the night, dark sky
It goes around
In the sky of Earth
It spins and changes

Noah
05/15/2013 1:21pm

MOON

Is high up in space
Disappears during the day
pulls ocean to sand
are rumors that it is cheese
The moon glows high up in space

Kamana
05/15/2013 4:52pm

I liked how you discribed the moon and how it looks like.

Noah
05/15/2013 5:00pm

The Moon is in space
Disappears during the day
pulls ocean to sand
are rumors that it is cheese
The moon glows high up in space

Noah
05/15/2013 5:02pm

I like how you used the rumor about cheese

Lilinoe
05/15/2013 1:23pm

Grand Moon Way Up High
Resting Quietly Right Now
Pearly White Shiny
It is Dark Outside it is
Eating Dinner at Home Now

Melody
05/15/2013 4:49pm

I like your choice of words that you used when you described the moon, especially the Pearly White.

Malia
05/15/2013 4:53pm

I loved the words you used to describe the moon and it looked like you put a lot of effort into it.

Lilinoe
05/15/2013 5:00pm

I love to write these kind poems! There F-U-N!!!

Kamana
05/15/2013 1:24pm

Big,Round,Fat,Bright,light
The moon is a big fat light
Plus the moon is dark
The moon is big in the sky
The moon helps us see at night

Noah
05/15/2013 4:49pm

I really like how you really described the Moon.

Rylee
05/15/2013 4:50pm

Good job when you describe about properties about the moon

Kamana
05/15/2013 4:51pm

I liked how i described the moon

Lilinoe
05/15/2013 4:53pm

You have a good sense of humor when you said "Big Fat Light"

Trajhen
05/15/2013 4:58pm

The moon is when we sleep
The moon only comes out in the night
The sun comes out in the day
The sun is when we wake up

Matt
05/15/2013 7:13pm

I liked how you put the transition from night and day or from moon and sun

Katie-Lynn
05/15/2013 5:04pm

The moon is shining
Shining bright in the night sky
With stars in the sky
Waiting for the shooting stars
Hoping to make one great wish

Gabby
05/15/2013 7:10pm

I really liked how you really mention stars in your poem.

Matt
05/15/2013 7:01pm

Big and majestic
Very, very high in the night sky
Bursting with bright light
That reflects over the planet
All of these describe the moon

Matt
05/15/2013 7:11pm

I liked how I used majestic

Gabby
05/15/2013 7:17pm

I like how you used your words.

Gabby
05/15/2013 7:14pm

Moon, moon shine brightly
Shine forever in the night
Moon, moon in the dark
Stars in the night sky shining
Beautiful site in the night

Gabby
05/15/2013 7:14pm

Moon, moon shine brightly
Shine forever in the night
Moon, moon in the dark
Stars in the night sky shining
Beautiful site in the night

Gabby
05/15/2013 7:15pm

I like how you said moon, moon in two different lines.

Isaac
05/15/2013 11:15pm

Dark and very calm,
Natural sunlight from the moon,
fully bright full moon,
Shinning bright like shooting stars,
Peaceful way to sleep at night.

Isaac
05/15/2013 11:18pm

Dark and very calm,
Natural sunlight from the moon,
Fully bright full moon,
Shinning bright like shooting stars,
Peaceful way to rest at night.

Trajhen
05/17/2013 12:34pm

The moon is when we sleep
The moon only comes out at night
The sun is when we wake up
The sun only comes out in the morning
It's a new day shiny and bright morning

kyle
09/25/2014 9:24am

the moon will turn you into a werewolf.


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